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James Carran, Craftsman Writer's avatar

Ooft. That got dark faster than a cloudy winter's evening in Aberdeen. Brutal, one of your finest pieces yet, sir.

Frank Theodat's avatar

Thank you, sir! Kind words.

John Jenkins's avatar

"You unlock this door with the key of imagination. Beyond it is another dimension - a dimension of sound, a dimension of sight, a dimension of mind. You're moving into a land of both shadow and substance, of things and ideas. You've just crossed over into the Twilight Zone..."

Frank Theodat's avatar

You got it. One of my all-time favorite shows - can you tell? :)

Zack Grafman's avatar

Best comment we’ve gotten so far boys?

Frank Theodat's avatar

Best by far. Twilight Zone-esque is what I aspire to be.

Olivia St. Lewis's avatar

Oh my god, this is horrifying and delightful and amazing. Well done!

Frank Theodat's avatar

Glad you enjoy it. Thank you!

Ben Woestenburg's avatar

well that was a cool story. Gotta love the corporate world! Literally dog eat dog.

Frank Theodat's avatar

Thanks Ben. This story was a cathartic release for me.

Joseph L. Wiess's avatar

Ugh. Cyborg's got to be careful.

Never know if you'll tear someone's fingers off.

Very well done, sir.

Edward Rooster's avatar

If there is a prize within immediate reach, or a thousand kilometers away, for both story and writing that hits the beats, and ends on the right note, it has been won by this piece. There is no debating the point. From the title (how it feels after reading now!), through every feint before the blow is landed, to the lights going out on the final line. So well done, Frank.

Frank Theodat's avatar

High praise indeed. Thanks, Edward! More stories are in the works.

V Kelly-Sibley's avatar

This is such a well-written story, and I completely enjoyed reading every single word.

Frank Theodat's avatar

Glad you enjoy it. Thanks for reading

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